It works like this: when I return to the B+B in the evening I am presented with a small jug of fresh milk with which to make whatever teas and coffees I might desire. Of course the weather has been warm which means that, by morning, the milk has gone off. Not that I'm bothered, if it was only slightly off I'd use it anyway, if too far gone I'll take my coffee without.
It had not been especially hot in the night and I was expecting something drinkable - but it wouldn't even pour. Solid. Yoghurt. The temperature must have been perfect.
I had a good old hack at Tec last night, and this occurred to me:
A recent blog by Jez commented on a discussion between him and another writer; gentle reader, I was that other writer. I am known for asking awkward questions. Anyway one of the areas we went over, in relation to "confident" writing, was scene transitions - not the scenes themselves but the pattern they form moving from one to the next.
For me this is critically important, if the scenes don't flow right it feels wrong and I can actually stop right there, unable to move forward until I fix the problem. (Usually something wrong with the previous scene, or my choice of next scene is wrong.)
As I trundled through the script of Tec only 6 pages in I realised there was a scene missing. In retrospect I recalled that I hadn't been entirely happy with the sequence, and when I read it through it stood out like a sore thumb.
The issue was one of passing time. The events of one day being followed by the events of the following day but there was absolutely no way the audience could know that it actually was the following day.
The scene that I had known was needed was one that firmly established that a night had passed. Not necessarily a very long scene (one minute max), just enough to establish a location used in the future, a character connected with it, the protagonist's relationship to it and the passage of time.
I'll write that tonight. And continue implementing the red-pen massacre.
What's on the turntable? "Hejira" by Joni Mitchell from "Hejira"